tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4302635054842743892.post8168967890888622598..comments2024-01-02T13:44:39.798-08:00Comments on The Dungeon Crawl: Flea Market Flash FictionSean Samonashttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15769623003300401312noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4302635054842743892.post-83636820273928158202011-08-11T13:59:51.971-07:002011-08-11T13:59:51.971-07:00An ethereal feel, I think, neat! Good job.An ethereal feel, I think, neat! Good job.Lindsay Mawson, Thriller Writerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04303701776290655946noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4302635054842743892.post-89967784021212465542011-08-01T06:15:24.464-07:002011-08-01T06:15:24.464-07:00it's its own secret society, underworld
great ...it's its own secret society, underworld<br />great writing!Tara Tylerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07587802105993889515noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4302635054842743892.post-22968882168703020872011-07-31T21:20:31.564-07:002011-07-31T21:20:31.564-07:00Dude, I liked it. Goddammit, there is something s...Dude, I liked it. Goddammit, there is something supernatural about the transaction, and the energy it imbibes. One of my faves so far...<br />Yeah, I know you were first, but I start reading from the bottom. An old habit, from reading scrolls.<br />Good work.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4302635054842743892.post-14572098567870707862011-07-30T17:43:21.099-07:002011-07-30T17:43:21.099-07:00I loved the emotion of this piece. It felt like a ...I loved the emotion of this piece. It felt like a very sympathetic view of a deity, which is lovely to see. My only real criticisms are that nothing actually seemed to happen. You described events and scenarios, but it all seemed to be a bit of a morass. I enjoyed it, but I felt like it could have gone somewhere. But, maybe that's just a taste thing. Much as I kind of wanted it to go somewhere, I enjoyed it just floating. One specific thing, the sentence where you talk about all the differnet topics. They were different, but all very broad. What would be good is if you threw in some more specific ones "Politics, history, the weather, the match this afternoon, the latest charts, how their sister/brother/mother is doing etc". Just a thought. Other than that, I think its a great piece, and the floating probably works better for flash fiction. Sorry if any of this was unhelpfulIndignant_Galactic_Citizenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15329856270537307291noreply@blogger.com